Chloe J
I believe I come from
the Earth.
The only mother I've got.
I come from everything on this planet--
that has never had a say
in how it has been treated.
Brothers and Sisters in Christ
slice through leaves
for a new way to worship.
I am from where
You come from--
The hope that the grey sky
was a mere punishment.
For the clouded lies we present her,
and the tomorrow you thought
would never come.
I'm the cotton tee shirt
from the cotton fields.
I'm the cotton you thought pure,
until I came home a mess.
I push away
Over and over again.
And in return
a tear streaked sunset.
Is it possible to walk away
on such an inspiring mother?
3 comments:
I like this very much.
just a few suggestions of course.
"Brothers and Sisters in Christ
slice through leaves
for a new way to worship."
perhaps take away the for? and add a comma or a dash, i don't know what the proper grammatical move would be there, but yeah, you get what im saying.
I also think you should add a little more between the last two stanzas. It almost sounds incomplete.
I love you! :)
oh by the way I really liked..i don't know what to call it, it's not a rhyme or alliteration..it's like the end of "Christ" and the beginning of "slice" really go well together.
haha wow, I can't even speak english correctly since I'm in Poland.
i love this.
you do have the earth, and LISA!
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